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I got a call from a friend on our high school reunion committee, requesting I do some writing- a top ten list and a poem, for a memory book they're making for our reunion, next month. What do you think of this poem, for the end of the book?


"Farewell Ode to the Class of ‘96

And so, we bid a fond farewell,
and wish our friends the best of luck.
May you all be healthy, clean, and safe,
May the next ten years be low on “suck”.

May you always have what makes you smile
Be it a monster truck, or a gal named “Lyle,”
whether farming salmon, or waiting tables,
writing legislature, or designing ketchup labels.

Laugh and enjoy yourself, in the coming years,
Relive your hockey glory, to imaginary cheers.
Become the dorks our parents were. Do it with a grin.
After all, in ten more years, we’ll all be old as sin.

While our butts get large, and our hair recedes,
And our faces wrinkle, and our fiber needs
increase exponentially as time goes by,
We’ll never forget our years at ____ High!"